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Another Request from the Author

It's been a while since I've posted an author's comment, so I thought I would take this opportunity to thank you for reading this fic.  I'm not sure who is reading or how many of you there are, but the page statistics suggest that there are a few of your out there.

I would like to remind readers that this story is a work in progress, so it is subject to revision.  I had an idea for a plot development that will come much later in the story, and, in light of that, I made some minor revisions to part 5 of the prologue.  They are so minor that they may not even be noticeable at this point.

I also would again ask for feedback on the story.  The last time I requested feedback was about a month ago, after posting chapter 19.  A lot has happened since then, so I thought would post a similar request today.  I'm not asking for detailed comments.  I would just like to get a sense of what people think like or dislike.  So please tell me what parts of the story are working for you and what parts are not.  Are the characters from the show coming across in character?  Are the new characters, Andrew and Jeannie, interesting?  Any comment helps.

Finally, I realize that Shane, despite being a main character, has taken a back seat for the moment.  That is largely because there are only so many scenes I feel I can write of Shane either sitting in his cell or being interrogated before it becomes overkill.  However, I did not want to give short shrift to Kim's cancer, and that had to occur while Shane was imprisoned, but before Rafe's arrival in South America.  I intend to compress the timeframes a little in the future so that Rafe coming to South American occurs a little earlier than it did on the show and coincides with Kim's bone marrow transplant.  That should allow for a bit more back-and-forth between the main characters.  Hopefully, it will balance out over the course of the story so that all of the main characters get their due.

Again, thank you for reading.  I look forward to any comments you offer.



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Oct. 30th, 2010 12:40 am (UTC)
I really enjoy Andrew and Jeannie, their interactions and their interactions with Kim. I'm also enjoying the stuff back in Salem as the scooby gang puts the pieces together. That part does feel like it drags just a bit though - in terms of how fast the pieces are being put together. I know that is at least partly because of trying to match the timing. Plus, I freely admit I'm a bigger fan of emotional interaction than adventure/mystery plot.

The story is wonderful and I'm looking forward to more.

Oct. 30th, 2010 10:03 pm (UTC)
I think the Salem stuff will speed up a bit now that the players are introduced. John and Marlena will be leaving Salem shortly, so most of the action will switch to Los Angeles. I wanted to introduce the players in what will be happening later, since Shane's escape from prison will be quite different from what happened on the show.
Oct. 30th, 2010 12:33 pm (UTC)
keep it going
I am still reading and loving it. I would love to get to the part where Kim and Shane are together, but I also know I have to be patient as the journey is worth it. I cannot wait until Shane is found and is with his children. I know there is going to be confrontation with Jeanne. I am hoping the "good" guy in Philip gives up the information to John. Guess I will just have to wait and see what happens next.
Oct. 30th, 2010 10:07 pm (UTC)
Re: keep it going
Thank you. I'm glad to hear from you. I'm trying to figure out how to get to the reunion a bit quicker than I initially planned, but I'm not sure that will work without compromising some of the side-plots.

If you are Philip fan, I hope you enjoy what I have planned for him. He is a complex character, being pulled in a lot of directions, so I want to show his conflict. However, he will have a major role to play in the story -- a role I never anticipated when I started writing the fic.
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